Sunday Writing Challenge – Write a story in under one hundred words

Today Swanwick writer, Jules Hartnett, returns to ‘Patricia’s Pen’ with ‘One Hundred  Words’.

One hundred Words

That’s all it took, one hundred words. Well, actually, there were ninety-eight – I counted. Ninety-eight. But it was the last five that did it.
We’d argued before, who doesn’t? But we always made up. Not like in the movies; no passionate sex, no post-coital cigarette, just the hours or days of silence and sulking and then ‘normal’ service would be resumed– until this time.
He yelled, ‘And I’m not coming back!’
His last five words.
So, this time I made sure he kept his promise.
The new lavender bush will hide the bump in the lawn.

96 words

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Thank you for sharing this with us, Jules. I for one think Jules’ story is fabulous. What do you think?

 

4 thoughts on “Sunday Writing Challenge – Write a story in under one hundred words

  1. magsmaud's avatar magsmaud March 1, 2020 / 10:33 pm

    Loved this Jules, really did. Made me laugh but at the same time appreciate the clever construct of the piece of writing. Well done.

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    • Patricia M Osborne's avatar Patricia M Osborne March 2, 2020 / 12:24 pm

      Isn’t it just, great magsmaud. Can you be tempted to submit a story in under 100 words for consideration?

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  2. Janet Francois's avatar Janet Francois March 3, 2020 / 3:32 pm

    I love this story by Jules. No time to feel sorry for anyone, no hypocrisy, no planning. Sheer impulse but of course now we are all sworn to secrecy should the police ever come round! A lavender bush was he a little man?

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    • Patricia M Osborne's avatar Patricia M Osborne March 3, 2020 / 4:33 pm

      I’m glad you enjoyed it, Janet. It’s amazing the stories that have been written in under one hundred words that say so much.

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